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2012년 1월 3일 화요일

Same~~^O^

                                                                    Apple tree
                                                                    Mapple tree
                                                                    Every things are same tree  

                                                                    Apple juice
                                                                    Mapple sirup
                                                                    Every things are same food

    Yucky food
    Sweety food
    Every things are same food

    Ugly boy
    Handsome boy
    They are both same kids

                         YOU CAN BE SAME^o^
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  1. 9- jiyoon Lee2012년 1월 6일 오후 6:36

    good idea was great.
    And i think you did a great job on each paragragh.
    i feel happy whan i read this poem^^

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  2. Heavinly2012년 1월 9일 오전 5:08

    Pororo, are you the same person as I am? :) Your message is strong at the end, but it was not expressed in the previous verses. Equality is the important issue, but “the same” should be replaced with the word “equal.” Also try to avoid the repeating words! Yet, I like your idea! - TA Hyebin

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